Introduction to Piece Two

The piece of writing that best shows my ability to make revisions is essay #1. This essay we were asked to identify the relationship between identity and culture. I feel my essay is much stronger and clearer now that I went back and made the necessary revisions. There were many great ideas but the organization of the essay wasn’t quite there. For example my first thesis was “Society today has portrayed a certain image that ordinary people in their everyday lives think they need to use as guidelines for themselves.” I have changed my thesis to include something about conformity.” Society today has portrayed a certain image that ordinary people in their everyday lives think they need to conform to.” This second thesis contains the word conformity, which is the title of my essay.